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She does a crab dance
while looking at those who swim
hoping that someone will understand
while looking at those who swim
hoping that someone will understand
(no one usually does)
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A small poem I came up with after an awkward phone call with my mom. I turned to tell my roommate and said, "I feel like a crab right now..." and this just came to mind! I feel that it describes my life all too well.
Constructive criticism and/or comments will be loved!
1.) Does the structure work with the poem's topic/theme?
2.) Is the word choice good?
3.) Is there anything I can do to improve this poem?
Constructive criticism and/or comments will be loved!
1.) Does the structure work with the poem's topic/theme?
2.) Is the word choice good?
3.) Is there anything I can do to improve this poem?
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It's a good description of feeling different and awkward