literature

Awkward Underwater Relations

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Literature Text

She does a crab dance
while looking at those who swim
hoping that someone will understand
(no one usually does)
A small poem I came up with after an awkward phone call with my mom. I turned to tell my roommate and said, "I feel like a crab right now..." and this just came to mind! :XD: I feel that it describes my life all too well.

Constructive criticism and/or comments will be loved! :heart:

1.) Does the structure work with the poem's topic/theme?
2.) Is the word choice good?
3.) Is there anything I can do to improve this poem?
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shep4life's avatar
It's a good description of feeling different and awkward